Hey, that's not a bad start even if you're living there (well, maybe after a heavy night as well).
That was a nice opening, and the rhythm's spot on, there's something a little unclear in the middle section, I'm not quite sure what it is, but something jars there, well, maybe you could shorten it a bit, I don't know, but then there's that strong image at the end which elevates the whole poem.
But the bottom line is that when you come to do the scene, there's a little engendered seed there going "Well maybe he did say that".
There's me, and there's … well, maybe Martin Wolf.
But it's so hard to exercise this time of year: it's cold, it's dark, you're tired, there are locusts (well, maybe not locusts).
Well, maybe there is but there's definitely not an over-supply of people who are any good".
Well, maybe there didn't appear to be much difference between the two men -- but there was a huge difference between the hundreds of key people Al Gore and George Bush would appoint to staff their administrations.
And remember that there's nothing better than fresh smelling linen (well, maybe there is something better; but not having to do with linen closets).
If I can't handle 13,600 diagnoses, well, maybe there are fifty that I can handle — or just one that I might focus on in my research.
And so for a long time, you sit there and you think, well, maybe it's a series of New Year's Eves, or maybe it takes place at two minutes to midnight on Valentine's Day, or maybe it all takes place during a single car journey – all of these, for want of a better word, gimmicks that provide the structure that I could then fill.
Part of me is curious how many others have been treated likewise, how many stories out there are similar to mine, because if there are a lot, well, maybe we should collectively do something.
