"makes it evident" is correct and usable in written English.
You can use it when you are trying to emphasize that something has been made clear or obvious. For example: "Her behavior makes it evident that she isn't a reliable person."
Peake can't make its sentences clear, but she makes it evident that, however hermetic her outpouring, it is not all bunkum.
But the multiple-choice format makes it evident that the old fault lines between rich and poor countries remain.
This makes it evident that the question of the temporary chairmanship will present the first test of strength between the opposing forces.
"This report makes it evident that New York City was, and still is, woefully unprepared to house the Enterprise space shuttle.
"The new report makes it evident that there is a growing divide between the haves and the have-nots," said Katja Iversen chief executive of Women Deliver.
Mr. Reuss, without underlining the point (he subtly circumnavigates it instead), makes it evident that the self-eviction practiced by Mohr stands for the national eviction of his fellow Jews.
The Chinese government made it evident that no one is protected from scrutiny within its financial system with the release of a scathing report accusing its e-commerce giant Alibaba of encouraging, and allowing illegal activity.
My time on the M.I.T. campus made it evident that more are undoubtedly on the way.
"Schools that make it evident they care about academic achievement attract more able students".
Ms. Palin made it evident that elected office is no fun.
He was quickly followed by 40 more Renault executives, who made it evident that they were in charge.
