The section describing the model is a bit dense, and can benefit from some rewriting.
I do however have some concerns about some of the details about the model and therefore propose the following that may improve the readability of the manuscript and the plausibility and robustness of the model: The section describing the model is a bit dense, and can benefit from some rewriting.
Ditto for the above topics, but I have found that often the Routledge articles are a bit denser.
"I'm talking about the criminals that matter," he explained patiently (they can be a bit dense, these FBI agents).
The British establishment, then as now, was dominated by arts men and could be a bit dense about the value of scientific advance.The Order of Merit the true prize of the British honours system, because it is limited to 24 living members and is in the personal gift of the monarch came in 1983.
But you'd have to be a bit dense to confuse a geographical and economic accident with an aesthetic movement, no matter how sick you are of hearing about how green the grass is over here, no matter how much you long for that nurturing Elysium of your dreams.
Some passages might be a bit dense for general readers, but he writes in accessible prose free of academic jargon.
The text is written conversationally and with anecdotes, and although it can be a bit dense at times, the historical narrative and ethical questions are a fascinating insight into a rapidly evolving, wide-ranging scientific field with significant sociological implications.
Then it began to dawn on me—I can be a bit dense sometimes what a great metaphor or symbol or whatever this was, not only for my family, but the doctors, too.
The explanation of how it works might be a bit dense for those not working in the field, but feel free to read the article in Nature to get a better understanding, if it helps.
