Still, more specific references in endnotes would have strengthened the book's authority, and in some places would have improved the narrative's flow.
Stanton storyboarded a group of new scenes and cut them into the film to convince Disney — or, as he put it, to "preëmptively prove" — that they would hugely improve the narrative.
Without a text to work from, it must be tempting to introduce a little white lie here and there: an evocative detail, say, or a new sequence of events to improve the narrative?
Reducing merit aid would also improve the narrative around college -- that going to college is the privilege itself and a form of merit aid as opposed to the current narrative that attending college is an entitlement whereby the merit aid is the privilege.
3) We have improved the narrative flow of our story, as suggested by Reviewer 1.
B) The Results could be reduced greatly (by ∼25%), and substantial re-writing of the text is necessary not only to improve the narrative, but also to remove redundancy (i.e., the first eight paragraphs of the Results section could easily be combined with text from Introduction section and Results section for Experiment 1).
Recent research has shown the value of humour, and particularly the use of cartoons, in helping people with long term conditions adjust and cope with their illness, and of their potential to improve the narrative and tailoring of information to support self-management [ 32].
The use of humour and cartoons to engage and motivate people with self-management is a consideration which is untapped by conventional theories and an approach which has the potential to improve the narrative elements and tailoring of information to support self-management [ 4].
Finally, our findings suggest that the combined intervention in text production and WM strategies was more effective in improving the production of narrative texts by students with ADHD than an intervention focusing only on WM strategies.
Topics discussed in unstructured sessions included improving the media, changing the narrative around refugees, teaching Indigenous history in schools, sexism in the judicial system, climate justice, marriage equality, death, parenthood, disability, charity, and toxic masculinity.
