Stanton storyboarded a group of new scenes and cut them into the film to convince Disney — or, as he put it, to "preëmptively prove" — that they would hugely improve the narrative.
Without a text to work from, it must be tempting to introduce a little white lie here and there: an evocative detail, say, or a new sequence of events to improve the narrative?
In their place, a new trio (Brian Duffield, Akiva Goldsman, Mark Bomback) has done serious surgery to "Insurgent," streamlining the story line, changing key plot points, inventing critical elements and in general improving the narrative flow.
Reducing merit aid would also improve the narrative around college -- that going to college is the privilege itself and a form of merit aid as opposed to the current narrative that attending college is an entitlement whereby the merit aid is the privilege.
B) The Results could be reduced greatly (by ∼25%), and substantial re-writing of the text is necessary not only to improve the narrative, but also to remove redundancy (i.e., the first eight paragraphs of the Results section could easily be combined with text from Introduction section and Results section for Experiment 1).
Recent research has shown the value of humour, and particularly the use of cartoons, in helping people with long term conditions adjust and cope with their illness, and of their potential to improve the narrative and tailoring of information to support self-management [ 32].
The use of humour and cartoons to engage and motivate people with self-management is a consideration which is untapped by conventional theories and an approach which has the potential to improve the narrative elements and tailoring of information to support self-management [ 4].
The present study analyzes the effect of an intervention program designed to improve the personal narrative skills of three girls who experience severe communication disorders and use AAC.
And it kept evolving: Incorporating Madeline Westen (the always outstanding Sharon Gless) more deeply into the core narrative only improved the show over time, and the addition of Jesse Porter (Coby Bell) added to the ways the crew could put one over on unsuspecting criminals, crooked spies and assorted lowlifes.
