The phrase "becomes evident in" is correct and usable in written English.
You can use it when you want to emphasize that something becomes obvious or clear in a certain situation. For example: "The urgency of the matter becomes evident in the fact that we must take action now."
8 In Africa, resistance first becomes evident in children < 5 years of age because of a relative lack of antimalarial immunity.
This becomes evident in Leeds after Mrs Adkin leaves to continue her shopping.
More support will be garnered as the extent of this self-inflicted catastrophe becomes evident in the months ahead.
As the series progresses, the need for that balance becomes evident in the personality and abilities of each team member.
Honey is added to the milk along with vegetable rennet at the start of the cheese-making process, so a touch of sweetness becomes evident in the cheese.
What becomes evident in conversation is that Mr. Dylan, himself a father of three, is not without intimations of his own.
The meaning of the title becomes evident in the final moments, as Randolph/Hudson learns, horribly and finally, that he can never return for "Thirds".
This becomes evident in the pictures of ancient temples in a current show at the Metropolitan Museum of Art, "The Pharaoh's Photographer" (through March 3).
The significance of the tree becomes evident in due course inside the museum itself, which occupies the second-floor rooms of the Palazzo.
A different secret becomes evident in Ross Montgomery's The Tornado Chasers (Faber, £6.99 paperback), which combines comic writing with gathering menace.
What she means becomes evident in watching her play York Bowen's "Toccata," a contemporary piece so fearsomely complex that it took her awhile to find a supplier who carried the sheet music.
