Suggestions for a further draft: for me, it's better without that question ("did you survive?") in line three, so that when "did we survive?" comes in the last line it has greater impact.
The first draft of the paper was written by JW and all authors provided critical input and revisions of all further drafts.
A further draft of the dossier was sent to Mr Campbell and JIC members on September 19.
A further draft of reinforcements, totalling 69 men all ranks, arrived on 25 May, and on 30 May the battalion had its first experience of combat on the Western Front.
We don't feel there is any watering down". Further drafting between the summit sherpas – officials from each country who prepare the communique in advance – will take place over the next three weeks, and Downing Street is confident the language on aid will be toughened up.
He might also have further drafts of beer (traditionally hopped) or ale (traditionally unhopped, and specified as Margate, Lambeth, China, or Hull).
Persia, on December 5, presented an ultimatum to Russia, demanding that the Russian troops should proceed no further and an undertaking that further drafts be countermanded.
In December 1948, after further drafting and lobbying by Lemkin, the UN general assembly adopted the Convention on the Prevention and Punishment of the Crime of Genocide, which passed into law two years later.
For further drafts of The Empty-Souled Hobbyist (I can hardly stand to type the title out again!) it might be worth considering the combination of rhyme and enjambment that helps make Manny Blacksher's Livelihoods a compelling piece of work.
He produced further drafts of his Theologia in which he analyzed the sources of belief in the Trinity and praised the pagan philosophers of classical antiquity for their virtues and for their discovery by the use of reason of many fundamental aspects of Christian revelation.
Last week they sent the first draft to Mr. Ryan, and he led discussions of it and of further drafts with three Congressional staff members — his chiefs of staff from Wisconsin and Washington and his spokesman — along with Dan Senor, a Romney adviser dispatched by the campaign's headquarters in Boston to manage the process.
